Fire Chief, Tony Sullivan detailed the use of all department ambulances and emergency help from nearby cities. Two seriously injured victims were flown by helicopter to a nearby trauma center in Statesville. Emergency personnel had to cut the roofs off three cars to remove victims and had a difficult time matching victims with their vehicles.
Due to the closing of the north and south lanes of I-790 traffic was diverted to Interstate 690, on the easter side of the city, which caused three hour delays during rush hour.
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